We are living in the world, but we do not know what the world is meaning to us. Once we were born, we knew that our lives were meaningful and so romatic to live in the world. Sometimes, we think about our philosophy is too narrow and can not follow the Scorate's idea. I think that what my stage but I do not exactly know who I am and what I am doing because philosophy is too difficult to understand our lives. Someone thought that they lived in the small world because they were born in their own country and died in there. They did not know about the real world and also did not see the beautiful things surrounding them. They were holding their old philosophy and no one could not persuade them to go somewhere as well as look for somethin new things.
Scorate said that we are following our shadows, but we need to see the actual world that what happen the outside. We need to open the eye and look at the sky and sun, for when we are staying inside the cave, how we can see the beautiful world around us. I think that most people are still chained in their lives and they do not want to change their lives anymore. First of all, for me, I do not go anywhere and do like to stay at home because I do not like to deal with the people. If I live alone, I will think about something and stay in my small room like a small world but I am happy with my life. I think that no one will bother me and I have a dream of my future plan so that I want to forward my goal. Some friends told me that I did not live like that because I have to deal with many people and step forward my plan to get my goal. If I live in the world, I have to open my eye and see what happen to the world. If I do not look outside what happening that how I can decide and what I know to do my next step. I have to learn about the actual things that what is right or wrong and can not follow the other shadow.
I agree with the Scorate's philosophy and this alert to me that I do not live in my small world. I have to go around the world if I have to and I can open my mind and listen what the people say to me. The most important things are that we have to break our chain and think about what we have to do our future plans. Our powers and souls are courage to be successful of our lives that give us the Scorate's lightening.
1.What was done correctly? You did understand the message that was given in the story of Allegory in the cave. You had a intro body and conclusion A+
ReplyDelete2.What was done incorrectly or was confusing? Still some grammer problems. Certain spelling mistakes and you didn’t quite write about how allegory of the cave reflects to a belief you have had in your life the whole being stuck at home could be a little more emphasized and with more explanation but you were on the right track.
3.Suggests how to fix the most important problems. Be as specific as possible with concrete suggestions.More practice Aye im sure you will become a great writer if you just practice and read over your writing and see if there are any mistakes and also if there is a way to make your point of view a little stronger. You might want to use a grammer book to know what words to put after the other but overall your improving from the last assignment. =]